This week I took care of some motivation problems for my characters and started revising the whole manuscript in clips. Clips are pretty much like paragraphs and they work best when they only deal with either internal stuff or external stuff. Mixing them can cause “confusion and delay” as Sir Topham Hat would say. And so I looked at every paragraph up to page 177 and made sure to divide the internal and external from one another. I also looked at the order of action in each clip. Does the motivation come after the action confusing the reader? Do my actions make sense? Do the fast actions occur before the slow ones? So I’m halfway done with this revision and after that…on to Beta readers!